Act 1 Scene 1.
( Algernon Sitting on Sofa smoking a Cigar )
Algernon: Lane, Have you arranged for the Champagne bottles to be brought down from the cellar? Our guests will be arriving any time.
Lane: Yes Sir, I bring, They are on the Table.
Algernon: ok, Well You Might as well pour me a bit as i should check whether the Taste is ok,( With a cheeky smile ) We dont want to be feeding our guests with off tasting champagne now do we?
Lane: Yes sir ( fills a fancy glass with 1/4 champagne and Gives to Algernon )
( Lane goes out )
(After a few Minutes Lane enters )
Lane: Mr Earnest Worthing.
Jack: Ahh Algy... Enjoying that champagne are we?
Algernon: I would have offered you some but lets wait for Lord Shoreman, It would be highly disrespectful drinking without him. ( Algernon Winks at Jack )
Jack: ( Sitting on the sofa.. Takes out his silver cigarette case and lights a cigarette)
Algernon: Jack! You know Lord Shoreman doesn't like people smoking.
Jack: And how is Lord Shoreman going to find out I ask?
Lane: I so Sorry to interrupt sir's But Lord Shoreman's car is here.
Jack: Holy Shit! ( Quickly puts out cigarette and runs to open the window, While Algernon hides the cigarette pushing it in the sofa cushions )
Lane: Enter Lord Shoreman.
Act one scene 2
( Sitting at the dinner table, all 3 men drink champagne and eat dinner hosted by Lane )
Shoreman: Well Moncrieff this is quite a feast, you must be trying to fatten me up
Algernon: No Sir, Just to thank you for always supporting me.
Shoreman: So Jack, How is that sick friend of yours? I dare say he is lucky to have a friend like you always going to visit.
Jack: ( chokes on Some chicken) ( drinks some water) Ohh, he sir is under full surveillance there is sign of his health improving I shall be Visiting him soon, Thank you for asking.
Algernon- ( rolls eyes)
Shoreman: That's good to hear.. I must ask which hospita...
Jack: (Interrupting abruptly).. This champagne is marvelous Algy, I'll be pouring some more for myself Algy?
Algernon: Go on then fill up my glass
Jack: Lord shoreman.
Lord shoreman: No I think ill pass, and with that note gentlemen ill take your leave, Thank you once again Moncrieff for this Dinner.
Algernon: It was a pleasure having you. ( escorts him outside)
Jack: ( Sips the final of his Champagne) - Algy.. Ill be going to. See you soon
Algernon: (Enters room) Lane!
Lane enters: Yes Sir:
Algernon: The dinner is over could you clear the table ill be in my room.
Lane: Yes sir
Algernon: (Holding something in his hand) Lane, Make sure you eat and Have some champagne it taste's quite good
Lane: Yes Sir, Thank you
Algernon goes to his room and unveils the cigarette case.. he studies it deeply.
By Zahra
www I really like the attempt you have made to create a dramatic couple of scenes. I also applaud your decision to establish clear status between the characters. You have also tried to emulate the way they speech with some limited success.
ReplyDeleteebi more attention to the context and how the characters should use language. The context of dinner and the period set as well as the relationships between the characters in not clear enough. SOme of the language used is less fluent than it should be and a lexis which includes the word 'shit' is not one Wilde would use - at least in a play.